Date: 13 Apr 2015 5:27 Title: Chapter 15
To be honest you shouldn't have posted this chapter. The story would have been better if you had just ended it with Goldstone's birth.
This chapter is at odds with the rest of the story. You fixed all the issues, and you should have left them fixed. Or you should have had them slowly fall apart over the entire story, not between two chapters.
At the end of the last chapter, Amelia was the Minister and was making changes to the Ministry, Dumbledore was dead, Voldemort was dead, Harry owned the Prophet, things were changing for the better.
Threre was no indication that things were getting worse, and it makes no sense for them to have gotten that bad.
Date: 12 Apr 2015 23:18 Title: Chapter 11
You do know that Snape is in the right here? He watched Harry, who is leagaly an adult, murder Dumbledore. And it was murder, Harry threw the first spell, and stated outright that he planend on attacking a defenseless person.
Snape tried to leave, but was unable to do so for some reason, he realzied that Harry had his wand and asked for it to be returned, Harry refused, so Snape tried to get it back from the muderer.
Then Sunan comes in and attacks a defenseless man...
Date: 07 Apr 2015 9:11 Title: Chapter 5
<“What grades did he receive?” asked Molly. She was concerned about what she was hearing. Harry and his fortune belonged to her daughter and no one else! Not even a dead girl!>How do these thoughts even go together? Harry took his N.E.W.T.s, that has nothing to do with Harry or his fortune going to anyone else. And who is the 'dead girl'? She doesn't know about Hermione yet, and even if she did she would assume Hermione was with Ron.
Date: 26 Nov 2010 21:33 Title: Chapter 6
I thought wormtail was caught and questioned. Why isn't Lucius in jail, or the others, for that matter? Did something happen, or did you forget to include wormtail escaping/being freed and Lucius' bribing Fudge to stay out of jail?