Date: 21 Aug 2017 1:46 Title: Chapter 1
First things first, you should set a set target date when ever you will completely quit, including 2 or 3 weeks from now. Thus, if your muscles within the penile area are relaxed, more blood will enter in the penis and a hardon will occur.
Date: 16 Jun 2008 23:05 Title: Chapter 1
Hope there is a lot of Dumbls, Herms, Won-Won, and Malfoy bashing coming up.
The best stories are those where, at the end, there is no more Dumbles, no more Malfoys, no more Riddles, no more Snapes, and Herms and Won-Won have been properly bashed. The REALLY great stories also bash Minnie-the-pussy and Molly-the-annoying fishwife.
Date: 08 Jun 2008 19:19 Title: Chapter 4
Ginny would be Miss. or Ms. not Mrs.
Also the characters seem simplistic. Keep working at it.